Monday, September 19, 2011

Business Letter

This letter is meant to be sent to ms. Phillips in regard to translation services being offered. The Sales manager used a letter format and is effective in using the format correctly. The letter includes the date, inside adress, salutation, body and complimentary close. Although the format is correct, the wording in this letter could be fixed to make it sound better and more effective. The letter could be more personal than it is to ensure the reader has a better understanding. The letter is short and to the point, leaving no room for misinterpretation. This letter is effective, but could also be fixed to make it even better than it is.

Thursday, September 15, 2011

Business Web Sites

I think that business websites that use overly formal, corporate speech should change the way they write. They should think more about the users reading their websites than making it sound formal. By using different forms of communication, these businesses can have a better outcome by their readers. The readers will be able to connect with it more if they use language that is well known and easier to understand. I think companies still communicate this way because they want to seem as if they are more professional than others by using different language. In reality, using simpler language will make the company better because more readers will understand and therefor be interested in that business.

Tuesday, September 6, 2011

Email Assignment

The attached inter-office e-mail was insufficient because it uses unfamiliar words that everyone might not understand. The e-mail could also use shorter words instead to ensure that all workers can make sense of. It should also use less technical words. The writer did not adapt well during this e-mail and did not make sure that all readers would be able to efficiently understand what he was trying to say.